tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4787651617821764608.post6457232417848484692..comments2024-03-24T20:42:17.578-05:00Comments on Rebekah's Reading Room: A New Life - Part 1Rebekahhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09588760551371274833noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4787651617821764608.post-29012368303102909752015-01-10T11:29:11.559-06:002015-01-10T11:29:11.559-06:00Hi Amy,
I don't think I'll reword this sen...Hi Amy,<br />I don't think I'll reword this sentence for a few reasons. One, is that I was trying for a sentence like this and I like it. :) Two is that so many readers now days have gotten stuck in the modern rut of short sentences, and they can't or won't take the time to carefully read a longer one, and I am not going to cater to that way. Sometimes long sentences are put in for the purpose of slowing the story down or at least the reader. Sometimes they set the stage, as this one does, for a slower story.<br />But thanks for commenting about it. :)Rebekahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09588760551371274833noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4787651617821764608.post-75802841976968730592015-01-10T09:35:31.975-06:002015-01-10T09:35:31.975-06:00It was cold, but not a penetrating cold where the ...It was cold, but not a penetrating cold where the wind cuts through coats no matter how thick they are, as though they were nothing, and chilling one to the very bone by its bitterness; this was a pleasant cold, brisk, invigorating, and the snow was lovely falling all around and rapidly covering up the drab grass and the few piles of ugly, dirty snow which still remained from the last snowfall.<br />This sentence does not quit make sense, well it does, but I think maybe you could try to reword the beginning of it?Amyhttp://livinginfaithandfun.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4787651617821764608.post-50823640047553510802015-01-03T20:53:10.783-06:002015-01-03T20:53:10.783-06:00I loved the start, but I'm fresh out of ideas....I loved the start, but I'm fresh out of ideas...at least for now... :) I'll definitely be back for more though! :D4rmeddyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00261666077481922005noreply@blogger.com